When I wrote Hung Up (Simon Pulse, 2014), I knew before I typed the first word that the entire book would be written in phone conversations.
No traditional scenes. No chapters.
No physical descriptions, besides what I could work naturally into dialogue.
It was my tenth novel–the first I’d written in that format–and it was one of the hardest things I’ve ever done. I was also struggling through a difficult pregnancy at the time. I guess that made the process of book-making and revising feel extra arduous. I ate so many saltines . . .
Since the book has come out, because of its format, I’ve gotten a lot of questions about writing dialogue.
Here are the four most useful things anyone ever told me about writing dialogue.
1. It’s not like real speech.
When I first started writing fiction for teens, I was encouraged by fellow writers to eavesdrop as much as I could on young people’s conversations. I realize now this was a terrible idea.
Yes, real speech is interesting, but overheard conversations are rarely going to arrive in any condition to insert into your novel. Plus, the cadence is all wrong. If you really listen, most conversations are scattered and loose and filled with pauses and “ums” and have no structure.
Dialogue is carefully composed. Every time I type a quotation mark I think, “Every word must be worth it.”
Here’s a quick anecdote. A few years ago, I was a volunteer gardener on Alcatraz. Because I spent most of my time low to the ground and beside the walking paths, I overhead all sorts of conversations. Did people talk about crazy personal things involving their medication, sex lives, and in-laws? Yeah, they did. But for the hours and hours of conversations I overheard on that island, I maybe got two small quotes worth using. Which isn’t the best return on time.
So sponging off teen conversations might help you stay current with teen slang, but I don’t think it’s helpful in crafting meaningful dialogue.
|The Rose Garden on Alcatraz|
2. Compression is often a great solution.
There are only three ways to revise: you add words, rearrange words, or subtract words.
When it comes to revising dialogue, I think you should aim for economy. I’m constantly looking for words to purge. (I started out as a poet; so I spent most of the 90s developing word-purging skills.)
If you want better dialogue, try having less of it.
3. Long interrupted sections of one person talking can feel inauthentic.
Dialogue is meant to go back and forth. If one person refuses to pass the ball, you risk creating a section that can feel strained, or boring, or insincere.
In Hung Up my characters do talk for extended moments, but I tried to set these up so they would read as confessions, which I think readers tend to like or at least extend more patience to.
|This baby goat is Laverne.|
4. Empathetic people write the best dialogue.
This is perhaps the best insight I’ve come across and I completely believe it. Because if you can accurately imagine how another person feels, you stand the best chance of accurately capturing what that person wants to say.
When generating or revising dialogue, I try to deeply imagine the characters as much as I can—where they are physically, geographically, emotionally.
If I understand how my characters feel, it’s easier to speak for them.
|This baby human is Max.|
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6 thoughts on “Guest Post & Giveaway: Kristen Tracy on Can You Hear Me Now? & Writing Dialogue”
Writing in that format must be so challenging. I'm intrigued!
LOVE what she said about real dialogue not being story dialogue.
But it's awesome she got all this gossip while working ;))
Thank you 🙂
Kristen, thank you for your post of dialogue. I'm always working to improve mine. And yes, I've learned listening to teen dialogue isn't how I want to write it. I like you advise on tightening and keeping out of the monologue mode. I'm looking forward to reading your work!
Kristen's voice is so gosh darn funny! Even in her more serious books she's got a knack!
Thanks for the advice.
As I've listened to the junior high kids chat while I drive them home I've wondered how I can replicate their conversations on the page. It isn't about what they say — you're right that listening in doesn't give you much material — it's how they say it. All about voice isn't it? I'm looking forward to reading your books.
Thanks for all the comments! Cynthia keeps such a great blog. It's fun to pop in and feel like I'm saying helpful stuff.
Christina, I really loved the gossip. But a lot of times I only got 1/2 or 1/3 of the story. So it really got my imagination going.
Robin! Glad you liked the post.
Deena! Thank you so much. I love it when people think I'm funny.
Paige, my middle-grade editor car pools for the junior high crowd and she tweets snippets of conversations. They're hilarious. Tweens can be so unintentionally entertaining.
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